"Lost & Found" - SHTF Fiction

Halffast · November 05, 2007, 14:30

I wanted to invite you all to read my latest work. It is called "Lost & Found". The first 20 chapters are posted HERE . More chapters will be posted as they are finished. All comments,suggestions, and critiques, both good and bad, are welcome. If you decide to read this humble work, I hope you enjoy it. Thanks.

David

Red Gander · November 05, 2007, 14:49

You wrote "Lights Out"? Damn, I love "Lights Out", I'm thrilled to hear you have a new one.

If anybody here hasn't read LO, do so ASAP. I don't suppose you ever had that published, dead tree variety?

**GOVT1911** · November 05, 2007, 15:26

Thanks. I can't wait to start it! I've read Lights out 4 times now.

Thanks for posting these. Are either available in dead-tree format???

Sig220 · November 05, 2007, 15:49

I, too enjoyed "Lights Out" and am sure I will enjoy "Lost & Found" as well.

Thanks!!

piperpilot1 · November 06, 2007, 04:52

Halffast -
I just read what you have posted so far of "lost and Found" on AR15.com. I enjoyed it. It's a quick read, which is always good when it comes to a story. I know it's just a draft at this point, and there's no reason for me to point out any misspelling or grammatical errors, not that there were that many of them, because I'm sure you'll get all that sorted out.
My only criticism or suggestion would be to flesh out DJ a little more. Maybe a little more of his backstory. I read a good deal of fiction and have even tried my hand at writing. Even taken a few writing classes, but I'm far from an expert. One thing I do notice among the more successful authors is that they really make their main characters seem real though details of the character's lives.
Anyway, good job so far. I'm looking forward to reading more down the road.
I also searched the Net and found "Lights Out" and downloaded it to read later.
Best of luck with your story.

Halffast · November 12, 2007, 09:54

Thanks for all the kind comments and suggestions. I really appreciate them.

David

torquemada055 · November 12, 2007, 18:48

How bout a link to the story!!!!!!!!

Why the heck brag about finding it if your not going to share it?
Some of us cant find the damn thing..............

Red Gander · November 12, 2007, 19:01

Lights Out (pdf):
http://www.gmorinllc.com/stuff/LightsOut.pdf

And there's a link to Lost and Found in the first post.

**indy_Muaddib** · November 12, 2007, 19:09

i liked lights out but the ending wasnt so hot.

needed a karate dude vs "FEMA coming in to take over" showdown with karate dude winning out.

L1A1rocker · November 12, 2007, 19:12

Quote:

Originally posted by indy_Muaddib
i liked lights out but the ending wasnt so hot.

needed a karate dude vs "FEMA coming in to take over" showdown with karate dude winning out.

There still could be. Lots of room for a sequil to Lights Out. HINT, HINT!! Really enjoyed that one. Look forward to Lost and Found.

PS. Thank you for sharing these works with us.

**indy_Muaddib** · November 12, 2007, 20:19

up to chapt 14 on lost and found, very good so far.

FIANNAFAL · November 24, 2007, 20:35

About time you showed up here!

Ops · November 24, 2007, 22:22

I've camped with Halffast, and he is the real deal. Hell of a good writer, too.

I look forward to my next trip out West..

Ops

goldenspurholderx2 · November 24, 2007, 23:22

Printed it up to settle in for a good read. I killed 3 ink cartridges on "Lights Out" and well worth it

AlaskanMBR · November 30, 2007, 17:54

Lights out is an awesome book, just finished reading it! Great ending too!

Good job, Halffast!

I'm definitely reading lost& found next.

Halffast · December 13, 2007, 15:18

Chapter 22 is posted. Thanks to all and Merry Christmas.

David

TRX450R · December 13, 2007, 18:02

Thank's for the chapter!!!! PLEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAASSSSSSEEEEEE keep them coming.

goldenspurholderx2 · December 15, 2007, 16:13

Halffast, minor technical gripe.

You have D.J. using what I believe to be an Eotech sight at one point in the story line "tuning it down to it's night vision setting" then later on as he prepares to make a longer range engagement you describe a tritium powered sight with a chevron (trijicon). I know D.J. is the gadget loving type and it wouldn't be out of his character to have multiple sights for his carbine but I think a character as well studied in the modern ways of combat as this one seems would not be willing to trust his life on "return to zero" quick mounts without firing a few rounds to be sure of his zero. Maybe an M68 (Aimpoint) with a 3X magnifier that can be mounted and dismounted without changing the zero of the sight?

Good read so far either way, just trowing it out there.

Halffast · January 15, 2008, 15:49

Another new chapter is available. Thanks.

Halffast · April 30, 2008, 08:37

Well, Chapter 25 is posted. This is probably going to be the last one I post. Thanks for all the support and keep an eye out for my next story, "Dead Reckoning".

David

MtnWulf · April 30, 2008, 21:28

Halfast, thanks for the great reads.

Lights Out is becoming a cult classic I think.

I'll be looking forward to your next book.

richbug · May 02, 2008, 21:19

My eyes hurt, I just read Lights Out over the last few hours without doing much else. Great read...

Wish it was available as a book on tape so my wife could enjoy it on her commute.

PennsylvaniaLongRifle · May 07, 2008, 01:24

I just finished reading 'Lights Out'. WOW!!! That is a great read. I couldn't stop reading it!
That would make a great movie but I don't think Hollywierd would go for it... too bad

gunsmoke · May 08, 2008, 00:14

I just finished Lights Out.

What an outstanding work of fiction.

It would make a GREAT made for Cable miniseries, with real potential for a series to follow.

The series could have beat the hell out of Jericho the failure of which will keep any thing like this from being produced, investors will point to Jericho and say it won't work, what a shame.

If an independent would pick it up and do a conservative production with good cast I think it would translate well to a 8 - 9 hour production. SciFi would buy it if no one else.

If it worked a prequel would do very well. I can see it in my minds eye. For some reason it reminds me of my favorite Stephen King novel and production THE STAND.

Great work brother Halfast!

I can;t wait to get started on L & F.

November 05, 2007, 14:30	#1
Halffast Registered FALaholic #: 2838 Join Date: Mar 2001 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 26	"Lost & Found" - SHTF Fiction I wanted to invite you all to read my latest work. It is called "Lost & Found". The first 20 chapters are posted HERE . More chapters will be posted as they are finished. All comments,suggestions, and critiques, both good and bad, are welcome. If you decide to read this humble work, I hope you enjoy it. Thanks. David

November 05, 2007, 15:26	#3
GOVT1911 Curio & Relic Silver Contributor FALaholic #: 9433 Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Raeford, NC Posts: 3,215	Thanks. I can't wait to start it! I've read Lights out 4 times now. Thanks for posting these. Are either available in dead-tree format??? __________________ I don't make policy, I just enforce the last 300 Meters of it.

November 05, 2007, 15:49	#4
Sig220 Registered FALaholic #: 11622 Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: SE Texas Posts: 4,869	I, too enjoyed "Lights Out" and am sure I will enjoy "Lost & Found" as well. Thanks!! __________________ Sometimes you are the bug.....sometimes the windshield.

November 06, 2007, 04:52	#5
piperpilot1 Registered FALaholic #: 30495 Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Colorado Posts: 427	Halffast - I just read what you have posted so far of "lost and Found" on AR15.com. I enjoyed it. It's a quick read, which is always good when it comes to a story. I know it's just a draft at this point, and there's no reason for me to point out any misspelling or grammatical errors, not that there were that many of them, because I'm sure you'll get all that sorted out. My only criticism or suggestion would be to flesh out DJ a little more. Maybe a little more of his backstory. I read a good deal of fiction and have even tried my hand at writing. Even taken a few writing classes, but I'm far from an expert. One thing I do notice among the more successful authors is that they really make their main characters seem real though details of the character's lives. Anyway, good job so far. I'm looking forward to reading more down the road. I also searched the Net and found "Lights Out" and downloaded it to read later. Best of luck with your story. __________________ Those who beat swords into plowshares usually end up plowing for those who didn't. - Benjamin Franklin The beauty of the second amendment is that it will not be needed until they try to take it. Thomas Jefferson

November 12, 2007, 18:48	#7
torquemada055 Registered FALaholic #: 15170 Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: 5thBt. 31st FF Posts: 3,632	How bout a link to the story!!!!!!!! Why the heck brag about finding it if your not going to share it? Some of us cant find the damn thing.............. __________________ NEVER forget April 19, 1775, and hell NO the bridge aint for sale!! I know, let's abolish the Fed, get out of the u.n. and kick them out of the country, close our borders and deport all illegals, bring every military member back home and close all foreign military bases. Cut ALL tax rates personal and business to 11%, abolish all unconstitutional federal agencies. It'll hurt but it would help us as a country.

November 05, 2007, 14:49	#2
Red Gander Registered FALaholic #: 31888 Join Date: Oct 2007 Posts: 97	You wrote "Lights Out"? Damn, I love "Lights Out", I'm thrilled to hear you have a new one. If anybody here hasn't read LO, do so ASAP. I don't suppose you ever had that published, dead tree variety?

November 12, 2007, 09:54	#6
Halffast Registered FALaholic #: 2838 Join Date: Mar 2001 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 26	Thanks for all the kind comments and suggestions. I really appreciate them. David

November 12, 2007, 19:01	#8
Red Gander Registered FALaholic #: 31888 Join Date: Oct 2007 Posts: 97	Lights Out (pdf): http://www.gmorinllc.com/stuff/LightsOut.pdf And there's a link to Lost and Found in the first post.

November 12, 2007, 19:09	#9
indy_Muaddib Curio & Relic Bronze Contributor FALaholic #: 17581 Join Date: May 2005 Location: Tampa FL Posts: 3,046	i liked lights out but the ending wasnt so hot. needed a karate dude vs "FEMA coming in to take over" showdown with karate dude winning out. __________________ All government, in its essence, is a conspiracy against the superior man: its one permanent object is to oppress him and cripple him. If it be aristocratic in organization, then it seeks to protect the man who is superior only in law against the man who is superior in fact; if it be democratic, then it seeks to protect the man who is inferior in every way against both. One of its primary functions is to regiment men by force, to make them as much alike as possible and as dependent upon one another as possible, to search out and combat originality among them. All it can see in an original idea is potential change, and hence an invasion of its prerogatives. The most dangerous man to any government is the man who is able to think things out for himself, without regard to the prevailing superstitions and taboos. Almost inevitably he comes to the conclusion that the government he lives under is dishonest, insane and intolerable, and so, if he is romantic, he tries to change it. And even if he is not romantic personally he is very apt to spread discontent among those who are. -H.L. Mencken 1919 Were not that lucky.

November 12, 2007, 20:19	#11
indy_Muaddib Curio & Relic Bronze Contributor FALaholic #: 17581 Join Date: May 2005 Location: Tampa FL Posts: 3,046	up to chapt 14 on lost and found, very good so far. __________________ All government, in its essence, is a conspiracy against the superior man: its one permanent object is to oppress him and cripple him. If it be aristocratic in organization, then it seeks to protect the man who is superior only in law against the man who is superior in fact; if it be democratic, then it seeks to protect the man who is inferior in every way against both. One of its primary functions is to regiment men by force, to make them as much alike as possible and as dependent upon one another as possible, to search out and combat originality among them. All it can see in an original idea is potential change, and hence an invasion of its prerogatives. The most dangerous man to any government is the man who is able to think things out for himself, without regard to the prevailing superstitions and taboos. Almost inevitably he comes to the conclusion that the government he lives under is dishonest, insane and intolerable, and so, if he is romantic, he tries to change it. And even if he is not romantic personally he is very apt to spread discontent among those who are. -H.L. Mencken 1919 Were not that lucky.

November 24, 2007, 20:35	#12
FIANNAFAL Registered FALaholic #: 9035 Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Mesquite Tx Posts: 648	About time you showed up here! __________________ Ever notice how expensive cheap women are!!

November 24, 2007, 22:22	#13
Ops Registered FALaholic #: 21633 Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: PA Posts: 2	the real deal.. I've camped with Halffast, and he is the real deal. Hell of a good writer, too. I look forward to my next trip out West.. Ops

November 24, 2007, 23:22	#14
goldenspurholderx2 Registered FALaholic #: 18600 Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: colorado springs, co Posts: 1,818	Printed it up to settle in for a good read. I killed 3 ink cartridges on "Lights Out" and well worth it __________________ http://militarysignatures.com/signatures/member1822.png

November 30, 2007, 17:54	#15
AlaskanMBR Registered FALaholic #: 28149 Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Sunny New Mexico Posts: 1,277	Lights out is an awesome book, just finished reading it! Great ending too! Good job, Halffast! I'm definitely reading lost& found next. __________________ Every citizen should be a soldier. This was the case with the Greeks and Romans, and must be that of every free state. -Thomas Jefferson

December 13, 2007, 15:18	#16
Halffast Registered FALaholic #: 2838 Join Date: Mar 2001 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 26	Chapter 22 is posted. Thanks to all and Merry Christmas. David

December 13, 2007, 18:02	#17
TRX450R Registered FALaholic #: 30304 Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: AZ/CA Posts: 139	Thank's for the chapter!!!! PLEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAASSSSSSEEEEEE keep them coming.

December 15, 2007, 16:13	#18
goldenspurholderx2 Registered FALaholic #: 18600 Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: colorado springs, co Posts: 1,818	Halffast, minor technical gripe. You have D.J. using what I believe to be an Eotech sight at one point in the story line "tuning it down to it's night vision setting" then later on as he prepares to make a longer range engagement you describe a tritium powered sight with a chevron (trijicon). I know D.J. is the gadget loving type and it wouldn't be out of his character to have multiple sights for his carbine but I think a character as well studied in the modern ways of combat as this one seems would not be willing to trust his life on "return to zero" quick mounts without firing a few rounds to be sure of his zero. Maybe an M68 (Aimpoint) with a 3X magnifier that can be mounted and dismounted without changing the zero of the sight? Good read so far either way, just trowing it out there. __________________ http://militarysignatures.com/signatures/member1822.png

January 15, 2008, 15:49	#19
Halffast Registered FALaholic #: 2838 Join Date: Mar 2001 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 26	Another new chapter is available. Thanks.

April 30, 2008, 08:37	#20
Halffast Registered FALaholic #: 2838 Join Date: Mar 2001 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 26	Well, Chapter 25 is posted. This is probably going to be the last one I post. Thanks for all the support and keep an eye out for my next story, "Dead Reckoning". David

April 30, 2008, 21:28	#21
MtnWulf Registered FALaholic #: 21997 Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Appalachia Posts: 861	Halfast, thanks for the great reads. Lights Out is becoming a cult classic I think. I'll be looking forward to your next book.

May 02, 2008, 21:19	#22
richbug Registered FALaholic #: 10484 Join Date: May 2003 Location: Western PA Posts: 3,764	My eyes hurt, I just read Lights Out over the last few hours without doing much else. Great read... Wish it was available as a book on tape so my wife could enjoy it on her commute.

May 07, 2008, 01:24	#23
PennsylvaniaLongRifle Registered FALaholic #: 13069 Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: northwestern PA Posts: 1,057	I just finished reading 'Lights Out'. WOW!!! That is a great read. I couldn't stop reading it! That would make a great movie but I don't think Hollywierd would go for it... too bad __________________ "One should forgive one's enemies, but not before they are hanged." - Heinrich Heine

May 08, 2008, 00:14	#24
gunsmoke Registered FALaholic #: 14772 Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: LOUISIANA Posts: 1,196	I just finished Lights Out. What an outstanding work of fiction. It would make a GREAT made for Cable miniseries, with real potential for a series to follow. The series could have beat the hell out of Jericho the failure of which will keep any thing like this from being produced, investors will point to Jericho and say it won't work, what a shame. If an independent would pick it up and do a conservative production with good cast I think it would translate well to a 8 - 9 hour production. SciFi would buy it if no one else. If it worked a prequel would do very well. I can see it in my minds eye. For some reason it reminds me of my favorite Stephen King novel and production THE STAND. Great work brother Halfast! I can;t wait to get started on L & F. __________________ "A fear of weapons is a sign of retarded sexual and emotional maturity." Sigmund Freud

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